This week’s post is by Kelsey Bryant, an accomplished author and experienced freelance proofreader and editor. Her tips on similes and metaphors offer excellent ways to enhance your writing. Take it away, Kelsey!
How to Avoid Clichés and Create Fresh Similes and Metaphors.
You’ve written your first draft, and now it’s time to begin the self-editing process. If you’re like me, this is fun! Half the enjoyment of writing comes from touching it up and making it into a piece of art to be proud of. Or perhaps you want to write more polished prose on the first go and limit the time you spend rewriting. Either way, today let’s consider how to avoid clichés and create fresh similes and metaphors.
What Are Similes and Metaphors?
First, let’s define terms. While each of these have broader meanings, in this article we’re going to focus only on their application to the actual words of your story.
- Cliché: a boring, overused expression
- Simile: a comparison that uses “like” or “as”
- Metaphor: a figure of speech that says something is something else to show a likeness between them
Clichés Vs. Unique Imagery
When we read writing that’s full of clichés — like this:
- His irresponsibility was just the tip of the iceberg.
- Her red hair made her stand out from the crowd.
- He was as skinny as a beanpole.
- When he didn’t get his own way, his face turned red as a beet.
- She was as mad as a hornet.
— our brains blink sleepily at the vagueness and familiarity of it all. The pictures, emotions, and ideas being evoked are weak at best, nonexistent at worst. When these trite similes and metaphors are scattered throughout a book and we don’t encounter any that feel colorful or handcrafted, the story can quickly become ho-hum. Even the plot and characters can suffer if you don’t present them with engaging descriptions and memorable wordcraft.
The Power of Similes and Metaphors
In contrast to familiar clichés, unique similes and metaphors help readers see something in a new way. They awaken readers’ imaginations and draw them deeper into the story. They contribute to fiction’s ability to alter the readers’ way of seeing the world and make them experience things they haven’t experienced in real life. In short, they’re integral to powerful storytelling.
How to Break Up with Clichés and Embrace Uniqueness
As an editor, I often encounter clichés in the manuscripts I edit. I point these out and encourage the authors to rewrite, sometimes offering suggestions. Here are some tips for eliminating the clichés in your own writing:
- Stop to think about the object or idea you’re describing with a cliché. What is the cliché trying to say? How can you break it down and be more specific and evocative?
- Consider all angles … what is the atmosphere of this passage? Is it joyous, peaceful, tense, ominous? The language and imagery you choose should reflect the atmosphere.
- How does the point-of-view character see the object or idea? Does she think it’s beautiful or ugly, comfortable or scary? What emotions does it conjure? Using your character as the lens readers look through puts the readers squarely in her place and her world.
- If it’s emotional, what physical experiences compare to it, and vice versa?
- Use language that engages different senses and emotions than readers expect.
- Think about connections and comparisons across nature and common human experiences.
Take Your Imagery to the Next Level
Another way to be creative is to play with a cliché — twist it, extend it, poke fun at it. You brazenly admit it’s there but use it unexpectedly. For example, “James was as skinny as a beanpole. Maybe that was because he ate said beans and little else.” Another example, “I’m at loose ends. Anything I think of to do just dangles pointlessly, finishing nothing, securing nothing, making me feel frayed and nervous.”
Your similes and metaphors should be familiar to your character or setting. For example, don’t use the simile “barreled forward like a train” in a book set in the Middle Ages. Think about what your medieval character would know: “barreled forward like a knight on his charger.”
Ways to Improve Similes and Metaphors
How can you improve your ability to craft similes and metaphors? Besides practicing, read writers who excel at this. Even if you don’t like poetry or flowery, descriptive writing, you can read them to glean from their creators just enough to suit your style. Jot down the phrases you like — not to plagiarize them, but to show you how it’s done.
A few authors I think are amazing at this are Charles Dickens, Elizabeth Goudge, L. M. Montgomery, Elizabeth Enright, Leif Enger, and Lisa Wingate, and others you might want to check out include Raymond Chandler, Stephen King, C. C. Warrens, and James Scott Bell.
Examples to Get You Started
To end our discussion and get you started, here are examples of a simile and a metaphor from two of these authors:
“Up in the gallery the band made a shattering, deafening row, the performers upon the wind instruments red as turkey cocks as they blew and trumpeted.”
— Elizabeth Goudge, Gentian Hill, emphasis added
Everything fits together beautifully: the setting is rural nineteenth-century England, so turkey cocks are familiar. Turkeys are also known as noise-makers, which describes the band. The scene is jovial and lighthearted, so the funny comparison enhances the atmosphere.
“It’s probably just more of his lies, but a little hope sparks fires anyway. I don’t stamp it out. Instead, I give it tinder and breathe on it real soft.”
— Lisa Wingate, Before We Were Yours
Instead of simply stopping at the cliché “sparking hope,” this extended metaphor fits perfectly in the voice of a young shantyboat girl in the 1930s who’s used to the challenges of survival, such as starting a fire.
P.S.
Now, I don’t suggest never using a cliché. Clichés are interwoven into our language, and if you don’t want to draw attention to a statement, they are acceptable to use because they blend in with the rest of our normal prose. Too much unique imagery can be exhausting to read, not to mention write. But limit them as much as you can and reach for more evocative words.
Bio

Kelsey Bryant is the author of half a dozen books and an editor who’s passionate about helping other writers hone their craft and get ready to publish. When she’s not absorbed in the pages of a story, she’s living real life and pondering how to portray it in a book.
Find out more about her at her website, kelseybryantauthor.weebly.com.
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